very interesting story you got going, obviously similar to MHA but different

not really gonna critique the animation as much as the storytelling, just some things

since you started with music, you obviously have the capability of adding it, you should have had music throughout – maybe less loud and more chilld, but it went from really-loud-music to quiet and that’s very jarring

you got to the meat of the animation quickly, but you definitely cut corners, like when the rock girl was fighting it lasted like 2.5 seconds and “your endurance is too low you’re tired” – boi it was 2.5 seconds you need to actually spend time animating combat if you’re gonna go that route

still overall lots of talking, which is fine, but you should do more animation work, more visually-appealing movements and effects, it takes time and takes work, but it looks better in the end and people will enjoy it

that intro is something else lmao it took 90 seconds

you got a lot of potential but biggest issue is you have a *lot* of pausing, and long pauses, for text etc

these static scenes can kinda get boring after a while, especially so if the pauses are just too long
if you really need all the dialogue add some animation (characters moving), play with the camera movement, etc – make it visually more appealing to look at