I only got up to Epitaph saying “WHAT!?” Before my device decided to cradh so I’m only reviewing up to there.

1) camera work is s**t. The camera sits in one place for the whole conversation. Have the camera cut, swerve, angle, pan, close up, birds eye, worms eye, you have so much to work with and yet you do nothing.

2) context. Providing lore to a fight is pointless if there’s no context to that lore. People like to say ‘add context to fights’ but i prefer ‘add context to the context to fights”. Nothing the characters talk about makes sense to the viewer and instead is just a waste of time.

3) character design. I won’t say any On O.B.Epitaph because he’s my own character. The professor bloke is real boring, just some black stick dude with a white shirt, grey jeans and a blue beard. It’s impossible to know who he is, what he does, what’s his personality and all that based on appearance alone. When you look at characters like Bowser, you know he’s a tyrant, a baddie, an evil king, a bully. You cna tell this becauof his appearance and stance. He stands wide, showing dominance. His shell is covered in spikes, he has big teeth and has big angry eyebrows, he’s a villain to a tee.
This guy is just a dude, there’s nothing to say on him.

4) The background is also very dull, like, where the hell is this taking place, the goddamn wilds of New Zealand. Add some rocks, mud, clouds, all sorts, make the area feel alive.

5) Animation itself is also very rocky. When i have characters talk in SNM, they move very slightly and subtly to make sure the viewer knows who’s talking. You do the same but it feels so stilted, nothing feels natural. This is also where camera work is key.

Overall) 2/10 serious improvement needed though you show some signs of progression.

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dead 2014 humour, grew out of it around the age of 15