Honestly very nice quality artwork and story idea you’ve begun laying out here but if I may be so bold I’ve got some suggestions for you.

Saying ‘ No need for introductions, we can do that along the way to the mission ‘ doesn’t make the most sense as they’re already embarking on their mission plus it isn’t a physical place, it’s an incentive, a goal to complete, an objective the likes of which was mentioned just two panels ahead. It’s a small detail but fixing up those little dialog lines will really kick up the depth and feel for the characters interactions with each other and the world around them.

Instead you could just put ‘ No need for introductions, we can do that along the way of the mission destination ‘, then cut to the next panel and just start with ‘ Aliptis-prime, an active war zone courtesy of the rebels .’ Once you’ve mentioned that next part adding an extra reason why the rebels are there even if it’s a quip or a sarcastic remark in retrospect to true events can just fill out those inequities of plot details in advance rather than have to explain it unnaturally and roughly.

Now for the third panel you have some leeway to change the subject to what it is they actually have to do now that we’ve established, location and the reason of the chaos there. Next you can roll with what you’ve already got towards the objective and whatnot but what doesn’t add up is the next panel saying ‘ Alpha, don’t fool the rookie. When have we ever landed smoothly? ‘ because nobody said it would be smooth, considering the delivery of the objective that was being told, it didn’t add up enough for the person next to say what they said in the fourth panel. It seems like too much of a forced quip funny guy line then an actual valid funny guy remark.

The consensus here is just to just smoothen out he dialogue and make sure you know exactly what it is you want to be doing when laying out the groundwork for your story, it hasn’t got to address everything but should at least give the viewer or reader incentive to continue.