What was good:

– Drawn style
– Camera shake
– Character movement
– Clear motives

Critiques:

– Explain in detail what you mean by ‘developing my channel’, how so would you do this, why should your viewers care, how would it affect those who watch you?
– Colour the character in maybe
– I’d advise you don’t ask for subscribers or likes, it can come off as cringe like asking for money from a mildly acquainted friend
– Leave the text on screen for longer
– Use a more interesting background and text font maybe