yeah infinitguess is right, the pacing is veeery slow

faster pace in general
don’t linger on text, we read it, like 20 times, keep it moving
better text colors, don’t make it hard to read
animation was wacky sometimes, background not moving when it should, etc
add subtle background ambiance/music so there’s no awkward dead silence

but generally there is promise, you’re telling a story and are obviously putting in effort and making it into something, just clean up the things mentioned above and you’ll have something here

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