more scriptwriting
I woke up in a chair in front of my old computer at like, 3 o’clock
last night

So, I fully went through the script and found some problems with the structure and writing. Lemme list ‘em so this doesn’t seem unwarranted.

1. how the characters meet icarus
the characters fall through the floor of a mall, into a subway and get separated. In the pre-revisional version louise kills a bunch of infected and then afterwards the characters regroup and meet icarus. however, I felt that there was no sense of urgency and it felt like he had no reason to join the characters. Now, the characters still get separated, but they find the subway overrun with infected. louise tries to hold them off to no avail, and is saved by icarus, and they get out, without jade and peri.
2. just the whole interconnected story
I’ve decided that after the subway incident peri and jade run into the other main characters who sorta act as antagonists, nichole and madge. then the characters all meet in the town and stuff like that, big climax
3. dialog
louise is a whiny bitch for the first half of script

ahhhuughhhh