I didn’t read it all but the way it is going sounds great.

Each sentence is well constructed and the scene is set nicely. I don’t know whether you have explained further on in the story about each character and the areas they visit or will, but if you just plan to keep it as a follow up from Dragon ball or linking into the universe, than even if you should ideally know the previous characters, you should give some explanation to them. That way even if the person doesn’t know much about Dragon Ball they will still know some information.

If you have done this than nevermind I thought i’d just point that out.