good beginner anim because you’re telling a bit of a story here

some tips

1) speed up the pacing, you’re gonna bore ppl to death
2) don’t dialogue so long, but if you do, you need to add some visual elements (animate the characters moving, camera moving, etc)
3) overall with the poses/animation, visualize what people and actions should look like irl, and portray that on the frame – a lot of times the characters just looked odd, and movement of things was off (like 1:42 when the gun is flipping about)