I’ma criticize mine by comparing to what I can do now.

So lets start with the cons.

The animation is pretty random. It can be bad at times. Like 1:00-1:10. The animation was lazily done. But scenes like 3:57-4:08. Its very smooth. All the characters are constantly moving and its pleasing to the eye. So consistency is very much an issue.

The next one is the story. There is not much to judge story wise since its the beginning of the story. So I won’t go too much into it. I’d say just do an better job to establish what is going on.

And then personality. ALL the characters has close to or has no personality. Well they all DO have personality. But its all the same. So it leaves the characters feeling plain and simple since everyone is the same. The only person I’d say that had personality was Radon. He was very presistant and brave and confident. Haha donut Radon.

Now the pros.

The animation is very above average and really good at times. And scene building was very well done. Espically with the climax of the episode. In my opinion it did a pretty good job at letting you know that this SN Demon is not your typical type. He is much more blunt and destructive than the other types. In other SN Demon storys he is just focused on destroying SN as an whole. There is no REAL reason why. I know I have not established WHY the SN Demon is bad so I’ll explain at the end.

Another pro is movement. At the end I’d say I did a good job at making the train scene seem to be going very fast with the fast moving trees and the camrea shake made it all the better. I was difficult to make it seem like we were going fast while having the background not move at all. Over I think it was well done.

Now the explain the reason why the SN Demon is bad.
The motive for the SN Demon was to break and destroy the whole universe. Very typicall but the reason why is understandable. He is broken mentally he used to be a good person but he was broken down.
In the beginning the Creator of All made the Gods. He told the Gods to build him an universe. They did so. The Gods made Demi-Gods. People to help with the small details. Those demi-gods are people like Ralph, SN Demon, and the Underling. There were MILLIONS of Demi-Gods. Most are dead and only a few hundred remain. Anyway Ralph loved his power. A bit too much. He started to kill demi-god after demi-god. When he would kill one he would suck all the power from their corpses to grow more powerfull. He killed all the Gods that lived and took their power. Then Ralph created Earth and created humans. But the Demi-Gods was still around. They were an threat. So he tried to take their powers but could’nt. Their powers were protected by the Creator. So Ralph locked their memorys and their powers and formed them into an human and put them on Earth. The SN Demon and Underling later unlocked their powers and memories. In Episode 3 Part 2 Thoughts unlockes his powers but not his memories.

I’m going to take that idea too. It looks really neat.